For this activity, you will read a paragraph that has many errors. You will identify the errors, and re-write the paragraph using correct grammar, spelling, punctuation, capitalization, and mechanics.

Original Paragraph

Malcolm was an avid photographer. He and his family likes to take pictures of nature and also taking portraits. When he was in california Malcolm liked to visit lake tahoe and takes pictures of the wildlife and sometimes the animals were moving to fast and they was blurry but the pictures of the lake were always perfect. Including pictures of sunsets over the lake with the mountains in the background.

Check for:
Subject verb agreement
Run-ons and sentence fragments
Capitalization and Punctuation
Grammar and Understandability
Sentence variety and style

Malcolm was an avid photographer. He and his family likes to take pictures of nature, also taking portraits. When he was in California, Malcolm liked to visit lake Tahoe and take pictures of the wildlife. Sometimes the animals were moving to fast and they were blurry but the pictures of the lake were always perfect. Including pictures of sunsets over lakes with mountains in the background.

This isn't perfect but it is better than the original, if you would like you can edit it.

jayilych4real jayilych4real · Answer 2 · 2021-09-16T12:30:15+02:00

Malcolm was an avid photographer. He and his family likes to take pictures of nature and portraits.

When he was in California, Malcolm liked to visit Lake Tahoe and he takes pictures of the wildlife.

Sometimes, the animals were moving too fast and they were blurry, but the pictures of the lake were always perfect; including pictures of sunsets over the lake, with the mountains in the background.

Some of the things which i corrected in the sentence include:

Improper capitalization
Run-on sentence
Misuse of Proper Nouns
Lack of proper paragraphing
Wrong spelling
Subject-Verb agreement