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In the following paragraph, the writer has used only simple sentences. Read the paragraph carefully out loud: PLEASE HELP!

My Gran is my hero. She is brilliant. She loves to read. She is easily bored. As a young girl, she struggled a great deal. She left home at 21. She moved to the West Coast. There, she chose to educate herself. She chose studies over security. She lived in poverty for many years. She eventually got a job teaching at university. She married late in life. She had a beautiful family. She never stopped learning. She died with a burning curiosity about life.

Now, think about the effect of the sentence structure you see here. Answer the questions below: WILL MARK AS BRAINLIEST!!

How does this paragraph flow?
What kind of rhythm does this paragraph have?
Which ideas are highlighted as most important? Least? How do you know?
Are ideas well connected to one another?
Can you tell what the relationship is between sentences?
How would you improve this paragraph?

Rewrite the paragraph above. See if you can reorganize and restructure the sentences in a better way.

Your paragraph should be long enough to show that you have mastered the sentence organization lessons in this section. Your teacher will grade the paragraph based upon the organizational flow, the effective use of subordinate clauses to make effective connections between ideas, and the effective use of prepositional phrases.

Respuesta :

the paragraph doesnt flow very well because of all the simple sentences. it has a very simple rythm and the most important ideas are "As a young girl, she struggled a great deal. She left home at 21. She moved to the West Coast. There, she chose to educate herself. She chose studies over security. She lived in poverty for many years. She eventually got a job teaching at university." This is because it stays on topic. Everything else really isnt important.The ideas are all spread out and really dont connect very well. TO improve this paragraph you need to connect the sentenes and change some to stay on topic.